hi, i made a corus for a rap, subject: being insecure about feelings
i won't post the rest of the lyrics since it's in norwegian and no one of u would understand it, i want true responses, but plz don't swear, mod's don't like it

here it is:

shed a tear
shed a tear in fear
shea a tear in fear of losing u
after all we have been through
problems with me and myself
but belive me there is no one else
me cheating on u is not the case
there will never be no one taking ur place
i just need to work some (Want to be allies? Sometimes I like to pretend I am a princess riding a pony..) out
but i think and hope we can get through this
so just close ur mouth
and atleast give me one last kiss

thx for ur help and ur responses

S-KaY

How harsh do you want criticism?

anything that don't violate forum rules work ^,^
and don't diss my spelling, ur coments from the lyrics alone is probly enough to make me cry